Rhyming Influence

My story is being narrated and told in the form of a rhyme. I want it to be fast moving and slightly comical. As it is a film made for children, it doesn't need to be anything too complicated. I have looked carefully at Roald Dahl's, Revolting Rhymes and am going to try and follow the same system that he uses in these quick witted rhymes.

MY RHYME...

This is only this beginning of the story:

In the harbor where they lay,

Three men thought it to be, the perfect day.

The sun was shining, the birds were out,

It gave them reason not to doubt,

That there wasn’t any, huge commotion, 

Going on, out in the middle, of the ocean.

They thought it was a good idea,

To find a boat to commandeer,

And sail it to their lady friends,

Who lived far away from these mens ends.

The girls home is painted red and white,

Where often shines a crimson bright light.

Its hard to miss, even in fog,